Blog Post 9 -Suzanne Bachman

This article in the New York Times was very compelling.  It is about this man that went to jail, and while he was in jail he painted, and created artwork to show his feelings inside the jail walls.

The interview in this article is very interesting and really tells the story about this person.  Jeff Green was the interviewee and is the head of Connecticut’s Prison Arts Program.  He was quoted in this article.  

“That he had art, that saved him,” he said of Mr. Skakel. “That gave him a way to continually have evidence that he was who he thought he was and not who his day-to-day world told him he was.”

This really adds to the story.  This is a really good quote to add to this story.  You know from this quote how this man really expressed himself through art.  

This really is a great quote and adds personality and really tells how this man is, while expressing himself through artwork.

http://www.nytimes.com/2013/12/13/nyregion/as-prisoner-the-artist-in-skakel-came-out.html?ref=nyregion

Blog Post 10 Suzanne Bachman

Dear Comm 160 class,

As just completing this class, up front right away people need to take it seriously. It is a one credit class, but that does not mean to not put forth a lot of work.  You have many writing assignments, and it can get to be a lot of work, if you are someone who waits until the last minute to do work.

The first quiz you take, you may get a little discouraged.  If you did not do well, do not stress.  This class will challenge you a lot.  This class is also super beneficial, and you learn a lot.  Even though it is a one credit class, you get a lot from it.  To succeed you definitely have to put in a lot of effort, and time.  Best of luck to you this semester!

Suzanne Bachman

Blog Post #8

http://www.goerie.com/article/20131031/NEWS02/310319910/Man-waives-hearing-in-Millcreek-burglary-escape-cases

This article is from the Erie Times News.  It has a well written inverted pyramid style.  The lead should never be too long, and should always inform us what the story is going to be about.  It should have the who, what, where, when, why.  This story is very effective.  You can understand the story easily because it is set up well, and the writing gets to the point.  The lead gets to what the story is going to be about.  “An Erie man faces trial on charges in a burglary in Millcreek Township in September and in an escape from the Millcreek police station after his apprehension earlier this month.”  This tells us who, and what is going on.  In the first paragraph is not all of the information, but you can tell what is going to be talked about in the story. The next paragraph which is the “Body” goes into the details of the story, as in who this man is, how old, and other details like that.  In the third part to the story which is the extra information, they explain what other charges he has going on, besides the charges he is facing for this story, which is very important to the story.  The story could have more details in the beginning of news story, but I think  it does a good job at explaining what is going to be said.

Blog Post #7

http://www.nytimes.com/2013/10/31/nyregion/officials-at-fire-dept-cite-need-for-smoke-detectors-as-2-die-in-another-blaze.html?ref=nyregion

In inverted pyramid style, the lead should have the who, what, where, when, how and why.  This should be around 30 words and one to two thin paragraphs.  The second is the body.  This should be all the crucial information in the story.  The last part is the tail and should have all the extra information.  

This news story from the New York Times is a perfect example of inverted pyramid style.      The lead tells you the who, what, where, when, really well.  “A deadly blaze at a house in Brooklyn early on Wednesday was another frustrating reminder for firefighters of how many fire deaths are preventable.”  This lead tells you the who, where, which was in Brooklyn, and when it was which was on wednesday.  This is also a good lead too because it is 30 words or less.  The next paragraph explains why, and who exactly were affected by it.  The story is very effective.  It is really well organized.  The first pargraph lead is short, but you get all the information in the next paragraph.  If they story was not written in inverted pyramid style, it would probably be all the over the place and not sound right.  How it is written now is organized and clearly written.

Blog Post #6 Suzanne Bachman

Fly on the Wall story

On a chilly October day, I went into Bruno’s for my normal lunch routine.  I stopped by the cafe to get a coffee to warm me up.  The sweet smell of pumpkin spice lattes really drew me in.  The time was around 12 o’clock, which as many know is the busiest time in Bruno’s.  I enter, and was suddenly hit with the aroma of chicken wraps that were being served at the grill.  There were so many people gathered around trying to get a quick snack before their next class.  I walked in to get some food, and I was shoulder to shoulder with people.  I went to get a table, and this circular table was situated in the middle of Bruno’s in the  middle of all of the excitement.  
As I got myself situated, you can really tell all the cliques that form.  You can easily tell the group of baseball players with their “PSBB” monogrammed attire.  The basketball players were all sitting together and talking about their new season, and all the training and practices they were going through.  All the different ethnicites of the school all convened together in to their different tables.  My really good Egyptian friend was sitting at a nearby table.  He did not see me, and seemed worried and his mind seemed to be somewhere else.  He seemed to be fighting with his girlfriend on the phone.  The professors that came in at that time seemed to all gather in the back and work on their laptops.  
As the time went by, everyone collected their things and slowly left.  All the conversations slowly came to a close, and people went on with their daily routine.

Blog Post 5-Fly on the Wall notes Suzanne Bachman

Fly on the Wall notes

For my observation, I went to Bruno's at a busy time around 11:30 to 12:30.  This is the best time to go because it is very crowded, and there is a lot going on.  The tables are packed.  I went and decided to sit in the middle of Bruno's, instead of sitting outside.  What I noticed is that the tables were split.  It was very cliquey.  You could tell the group of baseball players by their hats, and monogrammed attire.  The basketball players all sit at one table. The Asians sit together in one area, basically all the ethnic groups are split.  Teachers tend to congregate in the back in the corner tables on their laptops.

There are many conversations going on, though the sound is loud so they are hard to make out.

I was right by my Egyptian friend, without him really seeing me, and listening to his conversation.  It sounded like he was fighting with his girlfriend on the phone.

There was an aroma of the smell of chicken wraps being served at the grill.  The tasty smell of coffee from the cafe.

Blog Post #4
Suzanne Bachman

1. Amended-Verb. To make minor changes in order to make it fair or more accurate.
It was amended to reflect changes that happened over time.  Found in New York Times Article

2. Avoision- Noun. The arrangement of one’s financial affairs so as to avoid or minimize tax liability in such a way that it is not clear whether this constitutes lawful avoidance of tax or illegal tax evasion.
If the tax rate goes up, the avoision scheme gets more popular.   Found on a New York Times article

3. Flummox-Verb (Used with object) informal.  To bewilder, confound, confuse.
I was very flummoxed by the hard math problems I had to do.  Found in Cosmopolitan magazine

4. Compile. Verb (Used with object) To put together, (documents, selections, or other materials) and to gather together
I have to compile all my documents from work today.  Found in text book

5. Blowzy-Adjective. Having a coarse ruddy explanation/Disheveled in appearance
The girl tries to fix her makeup; she looks sweaty and blowzy.  Found in Cosmo

6. Laudable. Adjective. (Of an action, idea or goal) Deserving praise and commendation
I got a job as manager where I work.  That was a very Laudable achievement for me.  Found in a text book

7. Demur. Verb.  Raise doubts of objections or show reluctance/ The action or process of objecting over something.

My mom and dad had consented without demur to my marriage, and they were happy that I was happy.  Found on website
8. Abhorrent. Adjective.  Inspiring disgust and loathing; repugnant
I was abhorrent when I found out there was an unknown hair in my soup. Magazine

9. Expedient. Adjective. (Of an action) Convenient and practical, although possibly improper or immoral. 
That law was passed, but some people say is is expedient.  Found on New York Times.

10. Connote. Verb. (of a word) Imply or suggest an idea or feeling in addition to the literal or primary meaning.
I do not know her very well, but her tattoo could connote different feelings.